Like if the enjambment or rhythm were choppier or more unexpected, so that we as readers would also feel unsure of our footing?
That's a really good point. I wonder why she didn't do that?
Like the line endings are mostly where we would naturally pause anyway, which gives the poem a more settled, solid feeling. The only places I see more surprise happening are "the ocean once / smacked" and mmmaybe "when back / ashore."
(Tries reading it out again) Yeah, I get more of a lulling, flowing motion, like a gently rippling tide, rather than disruption. Is that what happens for you?
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Date: 2023-03-29 04:16 pm (UTC)Like if the enjambment or rhythm were choppier or more unexpected, so that we as readers would also feel unsure of our footing?
That's a really good point. I wonder why she didn't do that?
Like the line endings are mostly where we would naturally pause anyway, which gives the poem a more settled, solid feeling. The only places I see more surprise happening are "the ocean once / smacked" and mmmaybe "when back / ashore."
(Tries reading it out again) Yeah, I get more of a lulling, flowing motion, like a gently rippling tide, rather than disruption. Is that what happens for you?