Answer poem

[radiantfracture]

 I have done nearly nothing for poetry month, but here is a small quick poem in answer to one of yarrowkat 's on friendship:



With a lost friendship we lose parts
of the world's scaffolding, I think -- open air gapes
where the sturdy, slowly assembled
framework once contained us, though
sometimes it turns out, in that sudden
gush of sky, in our lurching out over forgotten space
that the view has changed for the better



I call this Snarky Mary Oliver mode.

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Comments

[cosmolinguist]

I like Mary Oliver and I love snarky Mary Oliver.

[sabotabby]

Oh, truth.

[larryhammer]

I can't imagine why you'd call it that.

[radiantfracture]

Oo it's icy yet it burns

[katuah]

i like.

reminds me a bit of the Masahide haiku:

Since my house burned down
I now own a better view
of the rising moon

[radiantfracture]

Yes, very much so.

[yarrowkat]

<3 we could put our two poems together like Green & i did with the wilderness/body piece (in an extended comment thread that went on for some weeks in a back entry).

may it be so, that the view has changed for the better.

[radiantfracture]

I saw bits of the thread but not the whole -- I will have to go back and read it entire.

May it be so indeed.

[yarrowkat]

here is the thread: https://yarrowkat.dreamwidth.org/683479.html

and then Green posted the resulting blended poem here: https://greenstorm.dreamwidth.org/1074278.html

[radiantfracture]

we could put our two poems together

Oh and yes! I forgot to say yes! Very cool idea.